Thank you for you, thank you for me
Thank you for separating
And allowing us to be free
Thank you for choosing to be 3
3 that form One
Father and Son
Father is sun?
This game is fun!
Meditation helps me to see
Egyptians knew, heart is the key
The brain removed for lack of need
It only serves to control me
Sins be undone
Karma has won!
Love everyone
All are the One
Patience taught to me by the trees
Standing still yet always moving
No matter what comes let it be
Remember that you are a seed
Sing aloud, dance about, and rejoice!
Bathe in light, drown in dark, it’s your choice
The truth is there is only one voice
4 comments:
I VERY much like this one Crow.
I think it's an excellent window into how you're spiritually growing. I especially LOVE the last four lines.
Very nice, BRAVO, BRAVO.
OTRA OTRA OTRA
This poem is all about movement, paths, and eventual return journeys home. Well the later half is. The first half is sort of about how I came to remember about those paths and journeys that I have been on/will be on. The meditation, the heart, Love, for me its what unlocked a piece of the cosmic puzzle that I had been lacking in this incarnation. So it was very important to me to include that within my thank you to God. The last half is what came out of those developments of faith, clarity, and heart. It only took me an hour to write, but thats because it was already written before I was born. Thats poetry, thats awareness, thats now. I can feel a building of momentum within my poem that I didn't intentionally construct. I agree the last 4 lines are the best. They were the conclusion of the thought of that present time, and now I can see that as you say, this whole poem, and the building within it, represents my own spiritual evolution. Thanks so much for the support, it means the world to me.
The picture is of the entire Universe. One. I was listening to the NIN ghost the entire time I was writing this poem. Just a thought. Perhaps theres an influence.
Many more poems, with much cleaner diction (in theory), on the way!
this has such a different feel from your other poems! There's a playfulness to it, i can tell that you're happy and enjoying the words. you've come a long way my friend!
my fav lines are definitely:
"Sing aloud, dance about, and rejoice!
Bathe in light, drown in dark, it’s your choice"
If you notice in those two lines there are 9 beats per line composed of 3 sections of 3 beats per image. The commas provide the little break needed to feel the "bum bum bum, bum bum bum, bum bum bum" effect. But I didnt intentionally do that, of course once I constructed one portion I modeled the other to correspond for flow, but I didnt realize that I had wrote 3 beats X 3 per line, and 3 lines (the last being The truth is there is only one voice) total in the last section.
Lots of 3. The whole poem is spiritual I guess, haha, I didnt intend for it to be anything but a Thank You for the Creator, by the end of it it seemed like I received a "your welcome" from above. Or perhaps thats just me......
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