So I had to do another lame poetry exercise were I was forced to use at least 5 sentences from a list of 20 that had the starting item that the metaphor/simile would be targeting and than we had to fill in the blank as to what the item would be compared to. Here are the 5 I choose, it was slim pickings yall trust me, whoever came up with this exercise sucks at poetry! hehe
1.Up is like down when
2.She held her life in her hand as if it were
3.The wino took to coma like
4. A child (blank) in (blank) is like a (blank) in (blank)
5."No, no, a thousand times no" He said, his hand
Strange huh? I was pissed that I had to work with this shit. So I made modifications to make it more personal, I changed pronouns around, but other than that I was stuck with this shit. Believe me if you saw some of the other examples, well heres one: a spider on an old mans beard is like.....damn who the fuck choose that line to include in their poem? Anyways here is what I came up with. Its due today, but if I get feedback before I leave for class I may alter this piece, its just the best I could do for now. haha. Enjoy!
“No, no, a thousand times no”
I said, my hands like Jesus when
He kissed Judas;
Knowingly embracing
My death.
“But I must leave” you
Replied, sitting on the edge of
The bed you checked
Your compact mirror
One last time.
That’s all I ever wanted.
As if in a dream
Up is like down
When I smoked
Your love. But
Everyone knows
That one is never
Enough.
Our relationship reminds me
Of the bum
On the corner of Fifth
And Broadway who you
Would give change to
After we got our fix.
In the end
The wino took to coma
Like a dog greeting his master
When he finally
Comes home.
In those days
You held my life
In your hands as if it were
Grains of sand
Slipping through your fingers.
Even as a man
I was still
A child in school, like a
Baby bird learning to fly;
I needed your discipline.
