Believing that it was real
We embraced and than she screamed,
“You can touch but can not FEEL!”
How dare you, I tried to say
But she didn’t hear the words
The wind carried them away
As if they were little birds
At this point I start to think
Wake me from this dream my Lord
Than she nods and gives a wink
“Weren’t you begging me for more?”
As she vanished I could see
I had never been asleep
5 comments:
Cool imagery! It's interesting that the imagery in this piece is based more on verbs than nouns. I saw all the little actions in my minds eye and the "how dare you"'s letters growing wings and drifting apart which was neat.
Than she nods and gives a wink
“Weren’t you begging me for more?”
Are these lines referring to the she in the third line or referring to "my Lord" of the previous line? Or are they one and the same?
very nice poem. very real...how long were you working on this on?
I worked on this poem for about 2 days or so. On and off. I did most of the writing at work during down time. Im still working on another parallel poem, another version, because the first poem I was trying to write turned into this one. hehe. different themes. glad you liked it though. it is real, its based on my dreams.
To Moose: I intended the line to represent the girl in line 3, but she is also the Lord, after all she answers the prayer. I didnt make the connection until after I wrote it but I realized instantly what it was I was trying to tell myself through the poem, through the dream, through this life. I guess Ive been begging for this experience in past incarnations. Be careful what you wish for......I love this mysterious life, even as it spits in my face.
I like how really cool literary/art stuff like the she/Lord oneness comes out through the subconscious. I dunno seems appropriate somehow. =)
I agree. Its woven together so beautifully.
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