Here is a very serious poem that I have been needing to get off of my mind. I feel in my heart that it is not finished yet. I have just barely got the first draft out over the course of the last couple of hours. Its just not enough time for a poem this important to me. As I write I have to struggle to not lose my composure. Im writing in serious reflection of the ones Ive lost on this journey of mine. People that can not be replaced, and that for the time being, just can not be a part of my life. It saddens me sometimes to know that I can not save them, I can not keep them safe, I can not reassure them that everything is indeed exactly where it belongs. Although I am doing fantastic, as of late I have been thinking of those around me who just arent. I refuse to let anyone or anything slow me down, or detract from my progress, and mission, to save the world. hehe. still, I can take a moment, an evening, to reflect on those of my brothers and sisters who are exactly where they need to be, but for some reason, that means they can not be anywhere near me. I love them and miss them dearly. I am sure we will meet up in the end. Perhaps thats the part of this poem thats still missing. For now I really appreciate anyone who takes a gander at this rough draft. Its causing me so much thought and energy as of the last few days, I just really need to get it out there and into reality for others to see. Thanks for the consideration cant wait to see everyone in 2 days!
This is for the other side
And the love we are denied
Lord knows how hard we have tried
Still refuse to start new
Although I have left that path
This life is the aftermath
I remember being sad
So lonely and confused
Got me where I am today
Birds still fly in skies of blue
I will always be the same
So far away from you
Brothers from beyond this time
So alike we shared one mind
But you chose the other side
Easier to run and hide
Now you live so you can die
So reckless and confused
We would laugh and cry each day
Smoking Satan in a daze
When she beckoned we obeyed
Color lacking world of grey
Will this stop? Is what wed say
It was so hard to choose
Got me where I am today
Birds still fly in skies of blue
I will always praise your name
So far away from you
Lovers from before this life
I knew you could be my wife
The first love; the purest high
Still captured for all of time!
Still remember how you cried
So gentle and abused
Why cant it remain this way?
I would beg, and plead, and prey
You were never meant to stay
Darkness led you far away
What was lost could not be saved
To gain we all must lose
Got me where I am today
Birds still fly in skies of blue
I will never feel that way
So far away from you
7 comments:
I like where you're going with this and I can see that it must be tough to write. I really like the complex rhyme scheme that you're using, I think it works well with the feelings that you're conveying.
It seems crazy that you're actually going to be here tomorrow night. I'm sad I have to work on Friday, but maybe we can all meet for lunch at Anns or something (and I'll try to sneak away early... hehe.. shhh...)
Awesome poem! This is the first one I read where I knew I liked it before finishing!
"I really like the complex rhyme scheme"
Ditto!!!
I'm curious if you had a typo or if you were playing on words in the second to last stanza. You said
"I would beg, and plead, and prey"
did you mean pray or what you wrote, prey?
yeah, I nearly asked about the "prey" thing too. I like it the way it is, but it would definitely be a different meaning.
I meant pray. It works both ways. Im leaving it. There are other typos though which I aim to fix right now. Thank you so much for the support. It means so much to when it comes this topic because I do not take it lightly. My friends are life and death to me, and although Im just fine without any of them around, I take time to acknowledge them, privately, and in this case, publicly. I guess thats my way of staying loyal to people who I cant, or choose not to, communicate with. It feels nice to be able to share that with others. I grapple with these themes very often, I hope to make peace with it though because I dont feel this type of reflection is good for me anymore.
oh as for the rhyme scheme...thank you! Im a firm believer that all good rhyme scheme's should build themselves and not be forced onto a piece. This was no exception and I was very pleased with how well it fit together with very little manipulation on my behalf. I assure I
changed very little to "make it fit" the rhyme scheme. I just wrote what was in my heart and what turned out was the awesome symmetry/flow that is the rhyme scheme. Not complicated, just random.
Wow, very nice work. Solid expression for such a complicated emotion. The fact that these emotions must manifest via poetry only speaks to the amount of powerlessness you must feel when these issues come up.
my poems are my sanctuary, my refuge, my therapy, and my enlightenment. definitely one of the few spaces I can tackle this topic safely.
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